This is interesting.

The high hats are a bit too loud so you may lower their volume a little bit.

The violin is really expressive which is really cool to listen to.

The mixing of the music is a bit too loud, keep the proportion of the music such as loud low basses and piano and the high violin but lower the overal "loudness" of the music to avoid saturations (unless you wanted to saturate it for that "grain" kind of effect).

If you wanted to use the saturation for a grain effect I recommand you to use some vinyl sfx to make that extra.

And for the bass progression, if you want to keep the loudness and increase the force into it and make it hit harder, you can make the piano follow the violins note, make it progressively louder and then play the note softly on the last note of the violin rift. Its gonna give that "desperate" kind of vibe.

Conclusion, I still gave a 5 star because you put your heart into it and I can feel the work you've put into it, keep going. (sorry for the bad english)

this is art lmao